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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs.

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Nowadays, a
numerious
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numerous
 of white-collar
jobs
 people
such
 as doctors, engineers and IT specialists are migrating from smaller or
economically
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economic
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 countries to wealthier nations for
enhanched
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enhanced
careers
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career
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prospective
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perspective
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 and personal growth.
This
 essay addresses these problems that result in a lack of
jobs
 and
also
 proposes effective solutions to deal with
this
 issue.
To begin
 with, a large number of
high
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 skilled professionals move
due to
a limited
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limited jobs
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jobs
 and a better
future
 for
own
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their own
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 and their
childen
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children
 because these countries give them
high paying
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high-paying
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jobs
 based on their skills and
the
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apply
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free
education
to
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for
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 their children.
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, It
is
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 a major effect on the poor countries will
be
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loose
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lose
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 their top professionals and
potential skills
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potentially skilled
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 people and
also
 impact
on
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apply
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growth and economy.
For
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a results
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results
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result
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, these
counties
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countries
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 will
be
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face in the
future
 a shortage of
their
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apply
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skilled workers, which they critically impact
on
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apply
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the
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apply
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education
, medicine, and other filed. On the other side, these are
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the solution
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solution
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solutions
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 that can help to
overcoming
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 problems, the
government
 take the responsibility to control
future
 talent
not
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and not
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 go to
other country
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another country
other countries
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. They should be reduced the retuirement age so that new talent
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
applied
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apply for
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jobs
 and another point
is
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should be improved
wages standard
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wage standards
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 and
modifed
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modified
 based on
the
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apply
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skils
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skills
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 and
experienced
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.
For example
, after
sometime
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some time
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 if the
government
is
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does
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 not
taken
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take
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 it seriously
then
 the
shortage
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a shortage
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 of highly skilled
worker
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workers
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.
Such
 as, the
adminstraion
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administration
pass
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the
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a
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 law for every
people
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person
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 to
given
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the
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a
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fix
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 service
of
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 the first five years after completing their
education
 served for country after that if they are not satisfied with the
jobs
then
 move to another nation. In conclusion, the migration of skilled professionals
form
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from
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 smaller or
econmically
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economically
 challenged to richer
nation
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nations
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 poses significant challenges.
However
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 the
government
 should make
the
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apply
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some changes in rules
then
 easily save their
future
 talent. The
government
 should
be
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apply
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provide
jobs
 based on their skills and improve the infrastructure and level of
education
 and the medical sector.
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