•Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
•In Today’s world, every
nation
is running in a race to prove them selves
that they are far better than the other countries. Some Correct your spelling
themselves
believes
that working extra Change the verb form
believe
hours
gives boost
to the growth of a Add an article
a boost
nation
. However
, I am not completely agree
with the given statement and will discuss the reasons in the following essay.
First and foremost, reason is that working excessive Change the verb form
do not completely agree
hours
will lead to a bad work life
balance which causes various health issues among Add a hyphen
work-life
the
individuals Correct article usage
apply
such
as stress, anxiety and so on. In addition
, if administration
supports Correct article usage
the administration
this
kind of policies
it will Fix the agreement mistake
policy
gives
a chance to the employers to exploit their employees. For illustrate, Wrong verb form
give
In
recent work surveys Change preposition
apply
which
held in 2020 found that a big proportion of Correct pronoun usage
apply
working
class Correct article usage
the working
get
exploited in a way of requesting or giving them excess Change the verb form
gets
work load
.
Correct your spelling
workload
On the
Contrary
, in some cases working long Fix capitalization
contrary
hours
played a vital role in the nation
growth within a short period of time. Change noun form
nation's
To
instance, after the chines government Change preposition
For
announce to deploy
their population in Wrong verb form
announced deploying
industrial
sector and Add an article
the industrial
runs
production plants for long Wrong verb form
running
hours
, China becomes the world
largest exporter in the world Change noun form
world's
due to
this
step. However
, this
step only helps in such
a short period as this
resulted
decrease Replace the word
results
the
morale of employees and results in Change preposition
in the
decline
Correct article usage
a decline
the
Quality of Change preposition
in the
overall
output.
Correct article usage
the overall
To Sum up
, there is no doubt that working excessive hours
skyrocket Correct article usage
the economy
economy
growth of a Replace the word
economic
nation
in a short time but it have
Change the verb form
has
their
heavily negative impact Change the word
a
of
their people Change preposition
on
such
as stress full life, unbalanced work-life balance and decline
in Correct article usage
a decline
overall
quality in
output.Change preposition
of
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