•Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

•In Today’s world, every
nation
is running in a race to prove
them selves
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that they are far better than the other countries. Some
believes
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that working extra
hours
gives
boost
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a boost
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to the growth of a
nation
.
However
, I
am not completely agree
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with the given statement and will discuss the reasons in the following essay. First and foremost, reason is that working excessive
hours
will lead to a bad
work life
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balance which causes various health issues among
the
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individuals
such
as stress, anxiety and so on.
In addition
, if
administration
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the administration
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supports
this
kind of
policies
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policy
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it will
gives
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a chance to the employers to exploit their employees. For illustrate,
In
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recent work surveys
which
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held in 2020 found that a big proportion of
working
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class
get
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exploited in a way of requesting or giving them excess
work load
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workload
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.
On the
Contrary
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, in some cases working long
hours
played a vital role in the
nation
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growth within a short period of time.
To
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instance, after the chines government
announce to deploy
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announced deploying
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their population in
industrial
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the industrial
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sector and
runs
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running
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production plants for long
hours
, China becomes the
world
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world's
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largest exporter in the world
due to
this
step.
However
,
this
step only helps in
such
a short period as
this
resulted
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decrease
the
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in the
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morale of employees and results in
decline
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a decline
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the
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Quality of
overall
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the overall
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output.
To Sum up
, there is no doubt that working excessive
hours
skyrocket
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the economy
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economy
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economic
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growth of a
nation
in a short time but it
have
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has
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their
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a
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heavily negative impact
of
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on
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their people
such
as stress full life, unbalanced work-life balance and
decline
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a decline
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in
overall
quality
in
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of
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output.
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