The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.

The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.
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The pie charts illustrate how children's charities in the USA are collecting and investing their money for the year 2016. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the money was sourced from various sources
while
they spent on only three segments. Looking more closely at the data, we can see that a third of the fourth money was received through donated food at 86.6%.
Whereas
the least fraction of the first chart was Investment Income and Government Grant that was respectively represent 0.2% of it. On one hand, the shares that were dominating the spending were program services with 95.8% figures.
On the other hand
, the rest figure was Fundraising which
was
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spent 2.6% of the budget, in comparison the other 1.6% figure was spent on management and general. To draw the conclusion, both charts have one particular share that was dominating each
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable organization
  • non-profit sector
  • financial allocation
  • philanthropy
  • government subsidies
  • individual contributors
  • fundraising activities
  • expenditure breakdown
  • financial transparency
  • budgetary constraints
  • donor base
  • revenue streams
  • fiscal responsibility
  • overheads
  • sustainability
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