5.D.Some People believe that travelling alone really benefits in learning a country’s culture and experience, while others believe that it is better to travel with someone you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Travelling is one of the essential requirements of people's
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globally. Some are of the view that visiting a country individually helps in gaining knowledge about
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heritage
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others say that having a company on a journey is more beneficial. I opine that having a company on a travel is more beneficial.
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a new destination alone can be risky and requires help at every step of the journey
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Introduction
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Body Paragraph Development
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Conclusion
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Cohesion
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Task Response
Remember to address all parts of the task. The essay should cover both viewpoints and your own, as per the prompt requirements.
Completion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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