Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There are some argue that about
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person for guiding in
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mind, which has some
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about their nature of guiding and move them ahead. From my point of view, I
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the former one and here is my essay. In my opinion, excellent person for
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like a leader in sensitive
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. Examples can be seen in many presidents of powerful
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such
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of America.
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sets an example for everyone, there are citizens who have
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of directing in their blood.
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have strong power for direction and
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have the
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guide and
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. Despite
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for their
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reach
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that.
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they can try to achieve some subjects .
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increase their possibilities with
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forward
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higher
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purpose. The more they want more responsibility, the more they should push harder. To
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accept that people can reach
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their higher
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, leaders can have their natural
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in
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. perhaps they can learn with some education and make
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achievement about leadership, but we can not
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forget that the
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countries
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