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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate
total
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the total
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money
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 spent
for
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on
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 various objectives related to the needs and empowerments of
police
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 officers,
such
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 as their salaries, technology, and buildings and transport with respect to two different years, 2017 and 2018.
On the other hand
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, the table reports the source of
budget
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the budget
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along with
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 its nominal
dedicated
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dedication
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for
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to
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police
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 over 2
years
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year
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 period in terms of
million
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millions
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euros
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of euros
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.
Overall
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, there was a
decreased
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decrease
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of
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in
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police
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 salaries in 2018 compared with what happened one year before.
However
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, the available budget for
development
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the development
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 and creation of technology used by
police
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 officers
was risen
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rose
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 quite significantly.
This
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 was supported
with
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by
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 the
rose
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rise
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of
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in
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 total
money
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 given by three kinds of sources, like National Government, Local Taxes, and other sources as seen from the table.
In addition
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 to that, the proportion of total
money
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 spent
for
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on
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 buildings and transport was stagnant. For more detailed information, the
police
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 budget in 2017 was 304.7
m
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million
 euros which was much less than
provided
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the provided
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money
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 for the same officers in 2018
that
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which
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 was 318.6 million euros. Another
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 feature from the bar charts is that the
dropped
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drop
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 in salaries for those people was very clear where in 2017 the percentage of it accounted
75
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for 75
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%,
while
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 in 2018 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, police with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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