It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance, for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are competing views on whether certain
talents
such
as sport
or Fix the agreement mistake
sports
music
are innate or whether these can be taught to children
at any age. Although
it is believed that only some individuals born
with these Add a missing verb
are born
skills
because of their genetic formation, these can be learned by the child with constant practice and hard work
.
Genetic formation is one of the major reasons why some people are born with special talent
Change the noun form
talents
such
as sport
or Fix the agreement mistake
sports
music
. Sometimes one of the parents is good at playing music
or any sport
, and they pass on these skills
to their children
. A particularly good example of this
is famous
Indian pianist, who revealed in one of his interviews that his mother used to play pianoCorrect article usage
a famous
,
when she was pregnant. Remove the comma
apply
This
is how he got a knack of
playing Change preposition
for
piano
. Change the article
the piano
However
, this
is a short-sighted view and does not apply to everyone and these skills
can be acquired by any child with hard work
and determination.
Constant practice and strong determination are the keys to acquire
certain Change the verb form
acquiring
talents
such
as how to be a good sportsman or musician. When children
engage in sport
or Fix the agreement mistake
sports
music
activity
, they perform repetitive tasks and after doing the same thing repeatedly, they become better. Take the famous Cricketer Sachin Tendulkar as an example, he was not born with a special talent, but he had an interest in cricket, and he did constant practice to master the skill, Fix the agreement mistake
activities
and
at the age of sixteen, he became Correct word choice
apply
the
Correct article usage
a
world famous
cricketer. Add a hyphen
world-famous
This
is why, I believe that certain talents
or skills
can be acquired by any child with hard work
and strong will.
In conclusion, I believe that certain talents
such
as sports person or musician can be taught to children
at any age, as it only demands commitment and hard work
from them, but there are some people who are gifted with these special skills
because of their genes.Submitted by meghnabawa91 on
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