Computer are being used more and more in education. Some people say this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The development of
technology
in
this
era
encourage
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the massive
usages
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usage
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of
computers
in every sector of our life including education. Half of
population
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the population
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stand
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stands
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with the positive impact of
computers
including laptops and
ipads
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iPads
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while
others believe
this
trend will lead to
the
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apply
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negative effects on
student’s
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students’
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performances.
This
essay will provide both
point
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points
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of
views
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view
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and
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a conlusion
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conlusion
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conclusion
conclusions
of
this
notion.
Nowdays
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, the
growing
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growth
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of
tech
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the tech
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era can not be denied.
Technology
help
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helps
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mankind to get done their work
easier
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easily
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not
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no
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exception in educational things.
Academic
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world
also
feel
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the sense
of
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apply
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the
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that
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technology
beneficial
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is beneficial
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.
Firstly
, Internet the can be
accsess
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access
accessed
through
pur
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our
computers
serve us various resources
of
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for
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learning like videos
learning
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apply
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and online
journal
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journals
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or articles.
Secondly
, using online platforms will
boarden
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broaden
our interaction with each
others
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other
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to collaborate and
interats
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interacts
interact
.
For instance
, when the whole world
has been
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was
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locked down during
covid-19
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COVID-19
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, all of the class was conducted online
with
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by
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utilizing
zoom
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Zoom
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or
google meet
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Google Meet
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. It can not be
runned
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run
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without
technology
.
Thirdly
, another benefit of
technology
is reducing cost and time
consuming
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consumption
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in submitting students’s
assignment
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assignments
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. We are no longer using
papper
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paper
and going offline to submit the
assigment
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assignment
. It all can be done
with in
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within
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our
computers
.
On the other hand
,
technology
is not just bringing the good side. It
also
comes with several considerations
due to
the time consuming
while
using
computers
. Game or social media on students’s
computer
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computers
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might
intterupt
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interrupt
their concentration. Stearing
computers
for hours
give
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has
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side effects on human health especially the eyes
due to
radiation from
computers
’s
display
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displays
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.
In addition
,
accessabel
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accessible
of
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to
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artificial intelligence
have
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has
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a
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the
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potention
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potential
to reduce
students’s
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students’
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creativity
due to
the easy ways to get the answer
of
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to
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every question of their homework. In conclusion,
hal
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half
of
majority
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the majority
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offended
thesse
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these
devices because of health issues,
focuse
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focus
focused
and
creavity
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creativity
of students may be reduced. On the other side, the
accessibillity
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accessibility
of learning materials,
easy
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ease
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to
cummunicate
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communicate
with others,
also
times
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time
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and costs reducing. These are the prior consederation to
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be inolve
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inolve
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involved
with
techology dispate
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technology despite
of the disadvantages
its
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it
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bring
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brings
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.
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