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Some people believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuels do you agree or disagree? Opinion Disagree. Economic problems Egypt Disagree. Social problems Third world countries

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It is believed that increasing fossil
fuel
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price
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 will be an
efficiency
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 way to shield
human
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humans
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 from pollution and tackle environmental issues. In
this
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 with the statement since it could lead to economic strain and social
effect
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.
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an increase
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increase
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increasing
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the
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 costs of
fuel
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 may reduce
the
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consumption
from
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 developing and
development
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 countries, it
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have
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a consequences
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to
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the economic
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economic
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,
specially
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 in developing countries where transportation is a lifeline for economic activities. Fossil
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fuel
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fuels
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 are a common
sources
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for
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 transport, including public and private vehicles, higher
fuel
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 costs could become the reason why citizens cannot afford and delay their generation income. As
the
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 result, the whole economic development of a country would fall down or slow down. It not only
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on
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pedestrians
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 work but
have
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 an effect on
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the countrie's
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countrie's
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countries
country's
economic
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.
Additional
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, there are majority of people go to work
by
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 their vehicles use
fuel
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or
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and
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 lower-income
group
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groups
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 use transportation as a way to generate money, if the price of fossil
fuel
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go
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 higher
then
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 it would widespread dissatisfaction among middle-classes,
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 these people spend a higher percentage of their income on transport and lead to economic strain.
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, it could exacerbate inequality between the
proverty
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poverty
property
 and the wealthy,
for instance
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, a higher-classes could show off how they can purchase
fossil
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fossils
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 and
other
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 cannot,
that
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 would make
lower-income
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the lower-income
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group
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groups
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 feel
disrespectful
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 and
embarrasing
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embarrassed
 about themselves. In
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conclusion,
increase
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 the costs of fossil
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fuel
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fuels
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not
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a
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 effective way to tackle
enviromental
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environmental
 problems and it
also
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have
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 negative consequences
on
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social and economic.
Citizen
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 may face
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widespread inequality and the
economic
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 would
being
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 fragile.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental problems
  • Increase price
  • Fuels
  • Economic strain
  • Developing countries
  • Consumption
  • Pollution
  • Economic activities
  • Lower-income groups
  • Inequality
  • Cleaner energy
  • Social unrest
  • Political instability
  • Fragile economies
  • Fuel subsidies
  • Widespread dissatisfaction
  • Economic downturn
  • Incentivizing
  • Green technology
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Adverse effects
  • Transportation
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