The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people have goals to be
a
successful person in the future, Correct article usage
apply
hence
they try to build some essential qualities. However
, some of them argue that academic educations are not the appropriate sources for this
needs. I do not agree with Correct determiner usage
these
this
statement, since university can provide both hard skills and soft skills which can be a vehichle
for people to gain victory.
Correct your spelling
vehicle
To begin
with, academic institutions have an intense curriculum that we should not overlooked
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overlook
such
as financial management. With
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In
current
industrial era, it is mandatory for managers to be literate about finance, especially when they run a profit-oriented business. Correct article usage
the current
For example
, several universities in Jakarta have set a mandatory subject package which include
financial education in the first year term. Change the verb form
includes
Thus
, as they graduate, they will not be surprised to run a business or involve
in a corporation as they already have a sufficient provision.
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be involved
Additionally
, Correct article usage
the university
university
is a perfect arena Correct article usage
the university
to train
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for training
student's
collaboration skills. Change noun form
students'
This
happens because most of the learning methods are conducted in group projects, thus
it fosters people's ability to communicate and work as a team. If, for instance
, students are used to perform
well in a group project, it can be said that they are ready to face the professional realm. Change the verb form
performing
This
is an intangible role from university
that can prepare someone to become a successful person.
Add an article
the university
a university
To sum up
, it is true that victory need
preparation, and to be a successful person, several qualities must be built. I believe academic Change the verb form
needs
institution
, Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
such
as universities and equivalents, can act as the main actor
to supply valuable provisions, both from technical and emotional intelligence.Fix the agreement mistake
actors
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