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today the high sales of Polular consumer goods reflect the power of advertisng and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Currently, the increasing sales of famous consumer
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product
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products
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 led to how advertising strongly
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 people's
spend
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 money not the authentic needs to be society. In my experience, I think the topic provides both agree and disagree
idea
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 for four reasons. My content
have
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 divided into four
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paragraphs
 including introduction, agree, disagree, and conclusion parts. I partly agree at the same time I disagree because
firstly
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, I agree that many bands are not popular so they require
to
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more
advertisement
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.
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,some local
brand
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 is that many
human
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 do not know what
brand
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 nor
use
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 to it.
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, some goods need to
use
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famous
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a famous
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 person to
sale
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it
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.
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, drinking local
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brand
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 require to promote when they want to get high cost.
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, nowadays,
shoping
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shopping
 online is not popular so they want to promote
on
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 social media
likes
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a
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television,
instragram
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Instagram
,
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and facebook
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facebook
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.
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,
season
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 goods need to
use
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 advertising because it
short
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 term to
sale
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. I disagree that
frist
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first
at
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 all, some products can
sale
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 by
itself
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themselves
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.
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, Apple which many people know
it
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.
Saecondly
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, many products have several comments because customers care about
review
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 more than advertising.
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, some
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product
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 have a high quality
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 good material , processing,
high
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and high
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 value. they can refer their friend and recommend
to
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use
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noht
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not
 least,
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a luxury
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luxury
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a luxury
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brands
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brand
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 everyone know it
good
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 and
high quality
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 everyone
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believe
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it
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. In conclusion,
advertisment
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advertisement
advertising
 is important to promote
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product
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products
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 that
not
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are not
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 well-known including shopping online,
season
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seasonal
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product
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products
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, famous people, and some
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product
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products
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 not too popular. They
use
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 advertising to dramatically
inceasing
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increasing
price
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prices
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 and hing grad value.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the response is well-organized with a clear introduction, coherent body paragraphs, and an appropriate conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea.
coherence cohesion
Focus on the logical progression of ideas. Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to present a well-structured argument.
coherence cohesion
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Present clear and comprehensive ideas. Avoid overly complex sentences where clarity is lost, and ensure relevance to the topic throughout.
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Provide relevant and specific examples to support your views. These examples should be well-integrated into your argument and contribute to its development.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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