Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behavior is now having a negative impact on society. Discuss
Children
do not look up their
mother or father almost they did Change preposition
to their
in
Change preposition
apply
that
long ago. but now it causes their conduct a negative effect on Correct pronoun usage
apply
community
. We will consider both Add an article
the community
side
of the discussion in Change to a plural noun
sides
this
essay, and give a concluding view.
On the one hand, those who support that children
do not respect their parents
as good
as in the past, the Change the word
well
parents
keep in touch with babies but they do not like to punish them now. Since the majority of families, they
did not know any things how about meeting up in the past, Correct pronoun usage
apply
and
the relation was strong between them. Correct word choice
apply
For example
, while
children
lived in the
Correct article usage
apply
week
families Correct your spelling
weak
thus
they have
always got on with Unnecessary verb
apply
another
. Correct pronoun usage
one another
furthermore
, proponents of people believe that parents
had have
not literate in the past, but they Wrong verb form
were
train
more polite Wrong verb form
trained
child
. Because, when the Fix the agreement mistake
children
children
make to irritate
at home, the Wrong verb form
get irritated
parents
punish them. For instance
, when parents
punish their babies, the children
were
kept silent.
Wrong verb form
are
However
, these days opponents of parents
think that the
Correct article usage
apply
children
are an
only Correct article usage
apply
child
in families. In fact, they are impolite and do not Fix the agreement mistake
children
got
on well with Change the verb form
get
parents
. Correct pronoun usage
their parents
In other words
, now the parents
train at school and they do not like to have a blunt baby. Moreover
, critics of children
behave improper
with Change the adjective
improperly
parents
since they love their mother and father but they have Add an article
a problem
problem
. In short, the Fix the agreement mistake
problems
parents
provide everything for them. That is
to say, when the baby will go
out with Wrong verb form
goes
parents
, they buy everything for them.
Correct article usage
the parents
to conclude
, it seems to me that the parents
should behave well with child
and they ought to catch up with their Add an article
the child
children
even punishment them.Submitted by TUTOO on
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