Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behavior is now having a negative impact on society. Discuss

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Children
do not look up
their
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mother or father almost they did
in
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apply
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that
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long ago. but now it causes their conduct a negative effect on
community
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the community
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. We will consider both
side
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of the discussion in
this
essay, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who support that
children
do not respect their
parents
as
good
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as in the past, the
parents
keep in touch with babies but they do not like to punish them now. Since the majority of families,
they
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did not know any things how about meeting up in the past,
and
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the relation was strong between them.
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,
while
children
lived in
the
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week
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weak
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families
thus
they
have
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always got on with
another
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one another
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.
furthermore
, proponents of people believe that
parents
had have
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were
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not literate in the past, but they
train
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trained
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more polite
child
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children
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. Because, when the
children
make to irritate
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get irritated
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at home, the
parents
punish them.
For instance
, when
parents
punish their babies, the
children
were
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are
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kept silent.
However
, these days opponents of
parents
think that
the
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children
are
an
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only
child
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children
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in families. In fact, they are impolite and do not
got
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on well with
parents
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their parents
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.
In other words
, now the
parents
train at school and they do not like to have a blunt baby.
Moreover
, critics of
children
behave
improper
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improperly
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with
parents
since they love their mother and father but they have
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a problem
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problem
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problems
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. In short, the
parents
provide everything for them.
That is
to say, when the baby
will go
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goes
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out with
parents
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the parents
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, they buy everything for them.
to conclude
, it seems to me that the
parents
should behave well with
child
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the child
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and they ought to catch up with their
children
even punishment them.
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