The diagram below shows how glass is recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides the complete recycling process of glass.
Overall
, The recycling process is divided into 6 steps and all the steps will
continue
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continue to
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iterate as a cycle.
Firstly
, the cycle
is started
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starts
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with the officer
picks
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picking
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the glass materials from the recycle bin and
loads
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loading
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all materials into a big carrier called
lorry
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a lorry
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. After that, the lorry will mobilize all the materials into a place called
treatment
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a treatment
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plant.
Whereas
at the plant, the
glasses
will be cleaned first by using the washing and sterilizing
machine
.
Secondly
, after the
sterilization
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the
glasses
are ready to be recycled.
However
, these
glasses
will not be used completely as they will be crushed by a crushing
machine
.
While
at the melting
machine
, all the
glasses
will be melted into substances, so they can be processed easily using
moulding
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the moulding
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machine
. The moulding
machine
will form the substances into new bottles
then
the delivery trucks will pick
the
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new bottles and distribute them to the supermarket
as
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and
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the cycle will start again.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words glasses, machine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • recycled
  • stages
  • collection
  • waste glass
  • sources
  • bottles
  • jars
  • windows
  • transported
  • recycling facility
  • sorted
  • color
  • processes
  • cleaned
  • impurities
  • labels
  • caps
  • crushed
  • cullet
  • raw material
  • melted
  • furnace
  • temperature
  • molded
  • new glass products
  • distribution
  • consumers
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