The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Cafe by season. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Cafe by season.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts everyday sales of meals at Brisk Café by summer and
winter
. the data has been calibrated in servings.
overall
, in
winter
the sales of hot
coffee
were the best-selling item.
However
, iced
coffee
was sold the most during summer. First and foremost, about 70 per
day
in
winter
hot
coffee
has been purchased.
meanwhile
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only 30 of hot
coffee
is sold during warm temperature season.
moreover
, soup is
also
one of the best during cold weather, with around 50 every
day
people bought.
On the other hand
, only half of the
winter
figure soup was consumed in the warm season
approximatly
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approximately
25 per
day
.
likewise
, iced
coffee
was people's
favorite
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favourite
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in the warmer situation, 40
in
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every single
day
was sold.
In contrast
, iced
coffee
was the least
favorite
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favourite
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in
winter
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the winter
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period, only 3 in a
day
have
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been bought.
Furthermore
, everyone loves ice cream in both seasons,
25
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with 25
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sold on cool days and 35 on hot days. Apart from that people eat salad without considering the weather. Salad purchase was balanced in both
season
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seasons
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, 25 in a
day
respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, coffee, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily sales
  • selected food items
  • seasonal variation
  • popular
  • peak
  • consumer preferences
  • anomalies
  • transition seasons
  • trends
  • comfort food
  • beverage
  • snack
  • consume
  • highlight
  • fluctuations
  • correspond
  • plummet
  • soar
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