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If a robot can think, learn, and express emotions in ways that are indistinguishable from a human, should it be considered a person rather than a machine? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Would a metal
robot
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 be considered a
person
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instead
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 of just a machine if it can talk, learn, and express itself?
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 question brings up a big debate. Biologically, a "human" is just a specific living creature with human DNA.
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, a "
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" is defined by how an entity thinks and talks.
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, if robots get real intelligence, they will become something
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, but not a human”. On the one hand, some individuals state that thinking and talking make someone a
person
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. In the past, philosophers argued that a
person
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 is any smart being that can think and reflect on
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 actions. If a
robot
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 can truly learn from the universe, share its thoughts, and feel happy or sad, it is no longer just a machine. It would be wrong to treat it badly just because its body is made of metal
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 of skin and bones.
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, unbelievers argue that machines are just very good at copying humans.
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 perspective says that even if a
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 looks like it has feelings, it is still just running computer code. It uses words without actually understanding them.
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, a computer can write a sad poem, but it does not actually feel sad. From
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 has no soul and no real feelings, so it should always be a tool for humans to use. In my opinion, if a machine shows real self-awareness, we must treat it like a
person
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. It is impossible to be a biological human, but its ability to feel and talk gives it value. In the end, we should decide if something is a
person
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 by looking at its mind, not its body.

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Score: 7. Your answer is full and clear, but add one more clear reason or example for your own view. For example, say what rights such a robot should have, such as safety or freedom from harm.
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Be careful with strong claims like “a person is defined by how an entity thinks and talks.” Explain that this is one view, not a fact all people accept.
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Your links are good, but some ideas move too fast. After “it is still just running computer code,” add a short line to show why this may mean it cannot have real feelings.
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Make the end a little stronger by repeating both the main test and your view: if a robot can truly know, feel, and choose, its metal body should not stop it from being a person.
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You discuss both sides and give a clear view: a robot with real self-awareness should be treated as a person.
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Your main ideas are clear and stay on the question. The sad poem example helps show the second view.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: opening, one paragraph for each side, your view, and an ending.
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Words such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For example”, and “In my opinion” help the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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