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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.

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What is given is a clear illustration of three different group ages of two countries, namely Yemen and Italy from 2000, and anticipated for 50
years
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 later.
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, the highest amount of
population
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 belongs to
people
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 from age 15-59, except for Yemen in 2000. Looking more closely at the chart of Yemen, it has the younger
population
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, in 2000, the first age group was 0-14
years
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 which contained half of the
population
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. After that, 15-59
years
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 has a similar amount (46%). At least, the old
population
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 accounted for 3.%. the anticipated result, after 50
years
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, shows that the young
population
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 increase by about 10
percent
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, and the old
population
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 rise by a small portion.
However
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, the proportion of children up to 14
years
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 old has fallen from 50%, in 2000, to 37%, in 2050. Regarding Italy, the young
population
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 had the highest amount in 2000, and
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secondly
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 60
years
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 and older
people
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 have a fifth portion of the
population
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. The prediction depicts that the portion of youngsters decreased to approximately 46%.
In addition
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, 42.3% of Italian
people
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 are old
people
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. Ultimately, the number of children under 14 decreased by around 3
percent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, population, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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