The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.
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The line graph illustrates the total number of people who attended three distinct entertainment activities
while
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the table provides information about the entrance fee in the year 2009.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
although
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the vast majority of people attended the cinema
however
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, its admission fees were the lowest not only for a single ticket but
also
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for families.
In addition
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,
while
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few folks showed interest in sports, its admission fees were expensive.
To begin
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with, more than 1000 people showed an interest in cinema in that year.
This
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was the highest as compared to other sectors,
nonetheless
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, the get fee was not expensive. Just 15
dollars
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per one individual and 55 for four populace.
Moreover
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, visiting the theme park was the second choice. Almost 400 mankind visited
such
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a place
although
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its attendance was not high ,
however
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, its gate fee was expensive 70
dollars
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per individual and 216
dollars
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for a family.
By contrast
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, the populace showed the least interest in sports. Less than 200 individuals participated
nevertheless
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, its fees were the most expensive among the other sectors. It ranges from 71 to 75
dollars
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per person and 280 to 298
dollars
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per family.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • entertainment venues
  • admission prices
  • visitors
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • revenue
  • cost-effective
  • correlation
  • trends
  • marketing strategies
  • fluctuations
  • cultural events
  • accessibility
  • demographics
  • peak season
  • off-peak
  • consumer behavior
  • pricing strategy
  • profit margin
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