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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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English
 is a gateway to the world and no one should be deprived of the opportunities that arise for those with a strong command of the
English
 language.
This
 does not mean that local
languages
 are dispensable,
however
. They have an important role to play in supporting education, including
English
 language education.
People
 who insist on prioritising local
languages
 are often those who can speak fluent
English
 themselves. Advocates of minority
languages
 need to be fluent in
English
 in order to research their field and support the cause at international conferences. In doing so,
however
, they are
also
 demonstrating why
English
 is so important. Learning
English
 allows
people
 to gain knowledge, communicate with society,
further
 themselves as individuals and have a global impact. It is unfair to willingly dispossess
people
 of
this
 ability in order to preserve tradition. But
this
 does not mean local
languages
 can be forgotten or downplayed.
People
 are more likely to succeed – not just at learning
English
, but in employment and education generally – if they are immersed in a community rich in history and tradition. Local dialects are a part of
this
 tradition. Efforts to regenerate and celebrate indigenous cultures in recent decades have demonstrated that the preservation of local
languages
 and the teaching of
English
 are
mutually-reinforcing
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 developments. In
this
 way, the local language serves as the bedrock for learning
English
, rather than being an obstacle in need of removal. I think it is important for everyone to learn
English
 but I feel it is unnecessary to frame learning
English
 and keeping local
languages
 alive as conflicting possibilities. Each goal supports the other. We should focus on how best to develop both
English
 and local
languages
in particular
 local contexts.
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Task Achievement
The essay generally has a clear position throughout the response, but could benefit from more specific examples to bolster the argument. Including case studies or citing specific instances where the balance between English and local languages has been effectively managed would strengthen the task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and reiterate the candidate's viewpoint, enhancing the logical structuring of the essay. To improve, make sure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence and that there is a logical flow between the points being made.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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