more and more people are moving to big cities why do you think this is happening? is this a positive or negative development?

In the modern era, more part of
people
are moving to big cities.
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provides positive and negative
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.these days technology and money are deciding everything.The following paragraph will discuss
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statement. On the one hand, The major reason is changing to big cities,
technological
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improvements. Nowadays, every
people
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likes to live modern and style
also
rich. So
people
must consider best quality and quick and safety.
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, more
people
go to
town
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area
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best schools, best medicine, and best work.without updating more
people
respect others. These days everything is going to increase.
furthermore
, can get very
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whatever want, if we
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town
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,
market
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, hospitals, shopping centers,
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and restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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are available.so
people
going
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to
town
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site. Their students are more like to live
city
.
On the other hand
, moving to the
city
gives some bad.
city
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have
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include lot of types
people
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.
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not good.without
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areas
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is not
give
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comfortable.and
that
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people
spend more money to live
big
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in big
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city
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cities
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.and can not
live
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poor
people
in big
city
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cities
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.so
that
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create
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creates
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big
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a big
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different
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between poor and rich
people
.
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, if we select to live
to
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city
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a city
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, that
give
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more voices
in
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the road, more things will be considered.not get good water, good air in
city
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, everything
depend
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on money. Rich
people
can manage their life. In conclusion, moving to big cities provides some benefits and drawbacks.we are liking to live a standard life.so, we will need to change our hometown.that must give more
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and experience. After, we can manage our life. we will face every challenge in confidence.
then
we will develop our skills and knowledge.
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