more and more people are moving to big cities why do you think this is happening? is this a positive or negative development?
In the modern era, more part of
people
are moving to big cities. This
provides positive and negative effect
.these days technology and money are deciding everything.The following paragraph will discuss Fix the agreement mistake
effects
this
statement.
On the one hand, The major reason is changing to big cities, technological
improvements. Nowadays, every Correct word choice
and technological
people
likes to live modern and style Fix the agreement mistake
person
also
rich. So people
must consider best quality and quick and safety.For example
, more people
go to town
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the town
area
best schools, best medicine, and best work.without updating more Fix the agreement mistake
areas
people
respect others. These days everything is going to increase. furthermore
, can get very quick
whatever want, if we Change the word
quickly
choosing
Wrong verb form
choose
town
, Add an article
a town
market
, hospitals, shopping centers, Correct article usage
a market
Correct word choice
and restaurant
restaurant
are available.so Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
people
going
to Wrong verb form
go
town
site. Their students are more like to live Add an article
the town
city
.
On the other hand
, moving to the city
gives some bad.city
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The city
have
include lot of types Correct subject-verb agreement
has
people
. Change preposition
of people
That is
not good.without know
Wrong verb form
knowing
areas
is not Correct article usage
the areas
give
comfortable.and Verb problem
apply
that
Correct word choice
apply
people
spend more money to live big
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in big
city
.and can not Fix the agreement mistake
cities
live
poor Verb problem
apply
people
in big city
.so Fix the agreement mistake
cities
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
create
Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
big
Correct article usage
a big
different
between poor and rich Replace the word
difference
people
.For instance
, if we select to live to
Change preposition
in
city
, that Correct article usage
a city
give
more voices Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
in
the road, more things will be considered.not get good water, good air in Change preposition
on
city
, everything Add an article
the city
depend
on money. Rich Change the verb form
depends
people
can manage their life.
In conclusion, moving to big cities provides some benefits and drawbacks.we are liking to live a standard life.so, we will need to change our hometown.that must give more lesson
and experience. After, we can manage our life. we will face every challenge in confidence.Fix the agreement mistake
lessons
then
we will develop our skills and knowledge.Submitted by ajeevatharsan on
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task achievement
The essay does not fully address all parts of the task. It fails to explain exactly why people move to big cities and to clearly state if this is a positive or a negative development.
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