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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishments is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children ?

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It is essential for children to learn the difference between true and false at a young age, which is important for their moral development. Nowadays, some argue that punishment is necessary for
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, it is important to consider that there are two types of punishments and those are effective and ethical.
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 are raising children should focus on teaching them, not just punishing them.Talking with your child about the consequences of his/her wrong actions may be more constructive in terms of the child's responsibility.
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 physical punishment can be harmful to the child’s health. Parents and teachers should work together on setting consistent boundaries. Consistency helps youngsters to
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 very difference between actions and consequences. It is really important to use
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age appropriate
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 methods that can be reflective rather that just
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 worry Encouraging positive reinforcement is equally vital. Rewarding good
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 reinforces the importance of making
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 agree that, it is really important to create a learning space that focuses on helping kids to understand right from wrong, rather than just punishing them.
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Task response
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Conclusion
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