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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates data about the amount
number
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 of
Catholics
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 staying in various countries from 2010 to 2013. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is noticeable that the sum of
Catholics
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 who were living in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 experienced the highest one,
whereas
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 Japan witnessed the lowest amount of
Catholics
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. As the graph demonstrates, the total of
Catholics
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 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, in 2010, was 75,940,000 which was more than the
number
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 of them in 2013.
Moreover
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, in 2013,
Catholics
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’
number
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 decreased slightly to reach 72,000,000.
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, Vietnam figure witnessed the same sum of
Catholics
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 in the two years. It was approximately between 5,300,000 and 5,500,000. On the one hand, the
number
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 of
Catholics
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 in China and India experienced 9,000,000 and 10,570,000 in 2010, and 15,000,000 and 19,000,000 in 2013, respectively.
On the other hand
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, Japan’s country underwent the lowest level of
Catholics
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 in both years.
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, in 2010, they reached 400,000,
then
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 they increased slightly to reach 509,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, catholics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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