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The given chart illustrates the percentage of four different recycled materials between 1982 and 2010 in a country.

The given chart illustrates the percentage of four different recycled materials between 1982 and 2010 in a country.
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The chart shows the percentage of recycling
rate
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 for four different
materials
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 between 1982 and 2010 in a country.
Overall
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, paper and cardboard have placed the highest
rate
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 among the four
materials
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 for 30 years. it peaked
at
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in
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 1994, reaching 80 per cent.
On the other hand
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, in 1982 and 1990 the material accounted for below 65 percent. The second highest material is glass containers, which reached
at
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apply
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60 per cent in 2010, the low
rate
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 was 40 per cent in 1990. Between 1986 and 1990, new
materials
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 were introduced - aluminium cans and plastics. The recycling
rate
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 of
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans is increasing, specifically showing steer increasing graph since 2002.
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, plastics always recorded the lowest
rate
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, indicating below 10
percent
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per cent
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. Its
rate
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 shows stable but indicates that recycling is not efficient. Currently, the increasing recycling
rate
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 is considered
glass
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for glass
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 containers and aluminium cans.
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, the country will be able to predict what kinds of
materials
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 are useful when cycling.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, materials with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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