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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables give information about the percentage of each five reasons and when
people
 left smoking.
Overall
, the majority of
people
 give up on cigarettes because they want to have better health
while
 the least reason is because they are sick at the moment. More
people
 tend to stop smoking rather than stay on that. It requires within the next six months and it is really rare for them to stop in a month. More than 60% stopped smoking for the reason better health in general
while
 it has a quite far number below it for other reasons. Financial considerations were averaging at around 30% and continued by mitigating smoking-related illnesses just below 30%. Family pleasure and present health problems became the least, the reason the percentage is under 20%. More
people
 intend to stop smoking rather than
people
 do not. It is quite popular for
people
 to not smoking within six months compared to any other period. In six months, the percentages ranged from 26% to 46%
while
 within the next year, it is between 18% and 23%. The lowest is within the next month with 8% and
maximum
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