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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram illustrates the different
temperature
 zones between two types of
mountain
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mountains
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, tropical and temperate.
Overall
, the data reveals the altitude of
forest
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the forest
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 has a significant difference, there are no
temperature
 and warm
zone
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zones
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 in temperate
mountain
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mountains
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.
Firstly
, tropical
mountain
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is
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are
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 higher than temperate
mountain
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, the former is about 5,500
metres
 and the latter is nearly 3,500. Meanwhile, the forest
zone
also
 has the different
height
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heights
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. In tropical
mountain
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, it is between 3,000 and 4,000
metres
, and between 1,300 and slightly over 1,500
metres
 in temperate
mountain
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mountains
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. One of the obvious
difference
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differences
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 between
these two
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this two mountain
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mountain
 is the existence of warm and
temperature
zone
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zones
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.
Warm
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The warm
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zone
 in
tropical
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the tropical
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mountain
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 is below 500
metres
, which is a suitable altitude for growing many tropical crops.
Temperature
zone
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zones
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 would be used for coffee and cocoa farming, they are suitable in the range of mildly above 1,500 and 800
metres
.
In contrast
, these two zones do not appear in temperate
mountain
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, mountain, zone, metres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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