The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in new Zealand between 1901 and 2101

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in new Zealand between 1901 and 2101
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the birth and passing rates in New Zealand throughout the period from 1901 to 2101. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that both given criteria despite the fluctuation over 200 years witnessed an upward trend.
however
, the birth rate
although
had sharply increased, experienced a gradual decline. From the given figure it can be seen that the number of births in 1901 was almost 20 each
second
this
number variation in 1961 to reach the highest amount of nearly 70 childbirths each
second
then
it had ups and downs to about 55 newborn children in each
second
by the year of 2001.
however
, it is predicted that
this
amount would start to drop moderately to just over 40 babies in 2101.
On the other hand
, the death rate was just under 10 people in
second
in 1901 and
this
figure fluctuation until 2001
then
it started to grow significantly to approximately 60 death per
second
in 2061 same as the birth rate it is anticipated that
this
number would drop down to just near as 60 individual death in 2101.
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