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Some people think that the best way to solve global environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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A group of
people
 believe that increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 is the ideal method to combat
the
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environmental issues across the globe. I,
on the other hand
, do not agree with
this
 argument since it appears to me that the best way of dealing with
this
 problem is to increase
awarenes
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awareness
 of
this
issue
.
Altought
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Although
 I cannot deny that
rising
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raising
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 a
fuel
price
 would alleviate
this
issue
 in
a
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 short term, the problem will remain the same
in
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 a long period. The main reason is that in human psychology the more you
incease
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increase
 the
demadn
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demand
 the more
people
 work hard to achieve it.
Thus
, from
this
standpoint
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 it could be said that if a
fuel
price
 is
risen
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 to handle the global environmental
problems
,
people
 will try not to lose their demand, which is
a
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fuel
 in
this
 case or
in other words
 convenience. In
this
 way, they will not even be aware of
the
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solving global environmental
issue
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.
In stead
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, folks will consider
this
 change as a punishment.
Nevertheless
, I firmly believe that solving
this
 problem is related to
people
 themselves or their minds. If starting from school years everyone is educated about the importance of natural resources and protecting them, it would have
a long-lasting effects
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long-lasting effects
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.
Apart from
this
, if social networking websites are forced to prepare programs about the significance of nature and solving existing
problems
 in
this
 manner, it is more likely to have positive effects. The main reason for
this
 is that it is the social media that controls
poeples
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people
mind
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minds
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.
Therefore
, if we focus on informing and educating individuals about the
issue
, it is highly probable that environmental
problems
 will be handled on a global scale. In conclusion, I consider that
while
 it is true that a high
fuel
price
 can somehow have positive effects
about
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 eradicating global
problems
 that are related to
environment
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, it will not be
continuously
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. The best method to combat the
issue
 is to develop
individuals
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individual
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 understanding.
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