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In some countries, criminal trials in law courts are shown on television so that the general public can watch them. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The publicity of the justice is a two-edged sword. Some
people
 believe it is beneficial for
the
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society,
however
, others are against it. I believe its advantages overcome disadvantages. Regarding drawbacks, it could violate
people
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 privacy. Showing courts on media informs
every one
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 about the subject and involving persons.
For example
, in
case
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 of a divorce court, a
housband
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husband
 and wife may complain about each other and disclose private facts about each other's
habbits
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habits
 or family. If it was shown on TV, it would be highly likely to impact their future life.
Moreover
, reviewing a case takes
long
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 so during
this
 research
people
 who follow the court may make their own judgement and take dangerous actions.
For instance
,
about
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 the divorce case,
people
 may think the
housband
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husband
 should be punished so they may bother him or his family. When it comes to benefits, it can raise awareness about the justice system in the country.
As a
result
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 all the
community
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communities
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 know that if they make a mistake, they should be responsible to
the
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all
nation
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nations
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 which can prevent criminals or authorities
to
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conduct
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 against the laws.
In addition
, it levels up the
people
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people's
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 trust
to
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 the government and the country. Because when it is clear and
every one
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 can observe and follow
court's
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 decision,
people
 can
asure
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ensure
assure
 that justice is always conducted. In conclusion,
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illustaration
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illustration
illustrations
 of courts in front of the public is meanless in some cases, it raises
the
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awareness about the courts and
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 of trust in the country. So I believe it is beneficial for the community.
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Introduction
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Linking Words
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Paragraph Development
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Conclusion
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Task Response
Address all parts of the task equally, ensuring that you cover both advantages and disadvantages and articulate which you believe are more significant.
Supporting Examples
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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