The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
The bar graph gives information about
percentage
of families in England and Wales that Add an article
the percentage
own
or Wrong verb form
owned
rent
housing between 1918 and 2011
Generally, the Wrong verb form
rented
percentage
of owned housing experienced a significant rise throughout the intervals. Meanwhile, the percentage
of rented housing faced a sharp fall within the range.
The percentage
of owned housing started with highest
number which was at approximately 78%. Change the article
the highest
However
, the figure began to decline up to 68% in 1939 and remained constant until 1953. After that, the percentage
gradually decreased until it reached its lowest point of approximately 31% in 2001. Nevertheless
, the percentage
of owned housing experienced a slightly
increase in 2011.
Change the adverb
slight
On the other hand
, the percentage
of rented housing began with 23% which was a
smallest number compared to the other. Change the article
the
Subsequently
, the figure started to grow up to 33% and remained stable in 1953. Furthermore
, the percentage
gradually rose up to 50% in 1971. At this
point, the percentage
of rented housing is the same as the percentage
of owned housing. After that, the figure kept increasing until it met its highest point of 79% in 2001. However
, at the end
of the periods
, the Fix the agreement mistake
period
percentage
faced a decrease until
64%.Change preposition
to
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