Trees are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world do you think this is a positive or negative development give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

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Nowadays , Export and import of the products are increasing day by day across the
country
. I believe
this
is a positive development between the countries to maintain healthy
relation
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relations
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and growth in
country's
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the country's
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economy . I will discuss
further
why sending material from one
country
to another
country
or region is a positive development with some examples from
newspaper
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newspapers
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and
journal
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journals
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.
To begin
with , People are extremely happy as they are getting
product
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a product
the product
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of their choice
while
residing in the same city and without spending money on travel .
For instance
, India is a hub of Ayurveda and these products are very good for skin and health. It has been revealed in the survey done by THE TIMES OF INDIA
because
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that because
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of
import
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the import
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of Patanjali Ayurveda
product
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products
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there is
a
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an
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immense growth
around
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of around
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30% in India's GDP.
In addition
, Some countries
produced
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more medicines and vaccines because
raw
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the raw
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material
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materials
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for medicine
easily
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are easily
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available in their
country
, as medicine is essential for all to treat disease . Each
country
has its own speciality and buying
those
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that product
those products
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product
in your own
country
is the best thing.
Secondly
, Local
brand
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brands
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going to vanish in front of international brands so it affects
to
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apply
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local
humans emotion
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human emotions
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. People start thinking
as
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that
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we are
loosing
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losing
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our identity .
for example
, Market survey done by
M.B.A
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M.B.A.
marketing students from Delhi
university
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University
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, People always prefer to eat at
Dominos
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Domino's
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Pizza
instead
of eating at any local
brand
. So indirectly ,
some times
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sometimes
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local
brand
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brands
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disappear and totally
vanished
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vanish
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from the market.
To sum up
, Getting products or delivering
product
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products
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of
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from
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different countries is
a
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the
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economic growth of
entire
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the entire
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nation so
Government
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the Government
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has to put some restrictions to avoid total hold of that particular
brand
in the market .
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