Some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museums, towns halls and sporting is more important than renovation of the existing ones, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
A fraction of statements said that building
a newer public facilities
Correct the article-noun agreement
newer public facilities
a newer public facility
such
as museums, town halls and sports stadium
is better than renovating the old ones Fix the agreement mistake
stadiums
while
others opposed
. I agree with the latter opinion since building new ones is a waste of money and resources Correct pronoun usage
opposed it
also
only Correct word choice
and also
left
Wrong verb form
leaves
pollutions
to the city since the old Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
building
will be abandoned.
Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
To begin
with, waste
of money and resources starts from the land, materials, and the labourers working on the new buildings. In my opinion, all of the things mentioned should have been used for other purposes that have not been provided by the government before, Correct article usage
the waste
such
as nursing homes, or as a conservation site for research purposes. The wrong aim of infrastructure can result in a not-so effective
outcome Add a hyphen
not-so-effective
hence
can be considered as a mispending which is not facilitating the growth of the city.
Correct word choice
and hence
On the other hand
, pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
such
as noise, air and visual pollutions
will occur do the ineffective Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
constructions
establishment. The unmaintained pollution of course will impact the lives around the site and Change the noun form
construction
interfering
with the productivity of the citizens. For Wrong verb form
interfere
instances
, noise pollution will disturb the peaceful moment that people Fix the agreement mistake
instance
desired
after a long day, air pollution Wrong verb form
desire
lead
to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
the
respiration Correct article usage
apply
issue
for children and adults, Fix the agreement mistake
issues
while
visual pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
occurred
when the abandoned old building Wrong verb form
occurs
left
unused and damaged.
In conclusion, Add a missing verb
is left
i
Change the capitalization
I
allign
with the opposing opinion since misdirected constructions will only inflict problems and wasteful of money and resources.Correct your spelling
align
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that your introduction sets the stage for the discussion by clearly presenting the two views and stating your position. Your conclusion should also clearly summarize the presented arguments and reiterate your stance.
logical structure
Develop paragraphs with clear main ideas, and use cohesive devices to connect ideas within and across sentences. Avoid overly complex structures that might impede the clarity of your writing.
supported main points
Expand on your main points with specific examples that illustrate your arguments. This specificity adds clarity and weight to your writing, and helps the reader understand the practical implications of your position.
complete response
Respond to all parts of the prompt thoroughly. Present clear arguments for both views before presenting your own opinion. Make sure that each point you make is developed fully, with clear explanations and examples where appropriate.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure that your ideas are expressed clearly and that your essay reflects a clear progression of ideas. Avoid ambiguity by selecting vocabulary and sentence structures that convey your ideas with precision.
relevant specific examples
Provide relevant examples that are directly tied to the arguments you're making. Examples should be specific, detailed, and enhance the reader's understanding of your viewpoint.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite