Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environmental responsibility while others believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Tourism has become a major industry in the modern world as distance is no longer a barrier with the advancements
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technology. Most people believe that
tourist
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should respect and accept the local culture of the place they visit,
however
, there are those who state that
visitors
are not supposed to take any of those responsibilities. I am personally against the idea and firmly believe all
tourist
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must respect the environment's traditions and
rules
. To start off, the main issue with allowing people to behave freely in a foreign environment is the cultural invasion
which
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it brings. If allowed freely, the tourists would ruin the native traditions of the area replacing them with their own.
Although
this
could lead to the birth of a multi-cultural
country
, it would
arradicate
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eradicate
the traces of many old and rich cultures all around the world.
Additionally
, if a person does not respect the traditions of a
country
, soon the new generation of
the
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locals
would
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let go of their own.
As a
result
, as time goes on less and less of the rich culture would be preserved. On a separate note, the freedom that foreigners have as
visitors
might
result
in hatred from the locals. If a young lad sees that
tourist
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are allowed to disobey the common sense he has had to follow all
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, they will gradually feel furious about the injustice.
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on, the fury will turn into hatred towards other cultures. The burden of following the
rules
as
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tourist
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tourists
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do not have to will weigh on some
peole
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people
and
further
down the road turn into hate crime or
disscrimination
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discrimination
and maybe even
racisim
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racism
.
For instance
, as the reports on social crimes show, the number of hate crimes against foreigners has increased
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the same rate as the
tourisms
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growth in El-Salvador.
Furthermore
, the
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theoretical
freedom given to tourists can
result
in global conflict. Obviously, no
country
appriciates
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appreciates
its citizens being held captive or arrested in another
country
. Yet,
visitors
can not draw
they
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the
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line correctly between the tradition and
rules
and
this
might
result
in them being arrested as they break
rules
they are not even aware of.
This
can grow into an international conflict with grave consequences for
bouth
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both
countries.
However
, if the
visitors
were responsible, they would be more informed about the basic
rules
and could prevent the disaster. In conclusion,
while
visiting another
country
should be a recreational
experince
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experience
, I firmly think that it should not hurt the native people.
As a
result
of the cultural, behavioural and political consequences I believe
tourist
should be held responsible for their action.
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