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Public transport should be funded by government so that it can be free for the people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#transport #government #people
In recent years, who has the responsibility to invest
fund
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funds
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 in public transportation has gradually become the focus of public concern. It is claimed that governments should
to
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use
money
 in public
transport
 construction to offer free
transport
 to the public. I tend to disagree with the above-mentioned opinion. There are mainly two reasons why public
transport
 should not be free. One of the contributing factors is that a large quantity of
money
 needs poured into constructing public
transport
by
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authorities. If wealth is used in public transportation. It might lead to
that
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governments
have
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 to cut down on
its
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their
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 investment
to
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in
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 other fields,
such
 as
medical
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 system, education system, and technological development. What is worse,
this
 will cause the decline of the nation’s economy.
In addition
, even though the governments can make
ticket
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tickets
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 free and reduce the intervals of public
transport
, it still can not
available
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 to lots of residents because they probably give up driving their own cars for commuting or travelling
for saving
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money
.
Therefore
,
this
 issue is not definitely easy to attempt. Admittedly, opponents believe that free public
transport
 can actually save the
money
 spent on maintaining roads
,
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 and preserving the bridge.
However
, especially in some extremely cold cities, even though no cars are driving on the road, there are still a lot of break places that need repairing
due to
 the harsh weather conditions. In conclusion, offering no-charge public transportation indeed brings a lot more benefits to the masses, but the government still need to finance other domains to support the development of the country.
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task achievement
Your essay does not sufficiently address the prompt. You should provide a more thorough exploration of the reasons for your disagreement, including potential benefits of free public transport alongside the drawbacks you've mentioned. Ensure your essay thoroughly covers the topic and address the question 'To what extent do you agree or disagree?' directly.
coherence cohesion
While your essay has an identifiable structure, it needs to have clearer logical progression. Use linking words effectively to connect ideas and paragraphs. Ensure that the introduction sets up the topic and your viewpoint clearly, and the conclusion summarises the argument effectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidize
  • sustainability
  • commuters
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • accommodate
  • equitable access
  • public transportation system
  • allocating resources
  • financial burden
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