The process of producing edible oils and fats, and margarine.
The diagram illustrates the process of producing different three types of
oils
. Overall
, there are three main phases; enabling and storage raw
Change preposition
of raw
materials
, production and packaging, distribution
of these products.
Correct word choice
and distribution
In
the beginning of Change the preposition
At
producing
, harvested raw Replace the word
production
materials
, such
as sunflowers, peanuts,coconuts
are transported from the farms to where they are Correct word choice
and coconuts
storaged
in silos. Correct your spelling
stored
After
this
, these stored agricultural products firstly
are crushed and milled by machines that are toothed and toothless impellers. Following
this
, the pressing phase begins, whereby the oil distills
from the raw Change the spelling
distils
materials
. Subsequently
, distilled product
pass the filters so as to convey steam machines. By using these steam machines Fix the agreement mistake
products
obtain
three Verb problem
apply
oils
which are sunflower,coconut, refined
Correct word choice
and refined
oils
from these raw materials
are seperated
and packed. When Correct your spelling
separated
these
has been done, edible Correct pronoun usage
this
oils
, fats and margarines are convey
to supermarkets and shops. Change the verb form
are conveyed
are conveying
Finally
, in these supermarkets and shops, they are submited
to use for consumers.Correct your spelling
submitted
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion