the graph below shows the number of university graduatesin canada from 1992 to 2007

the graph below shows the number of university graduatesin canada from 1992 to 2007
The graph below represents the figure of both
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and
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who got the certificate of university graduation from 1992 to 2006.
Overall
, we can recognize the number of female university graduates in
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all years was higher than the male. In 1992, the figure
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both graduates was the lowest during the
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,
as of
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70,000 and 100,000
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each
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male and female.
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both
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graduated from university as time goes by. In 2006, the number of
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graduates was nearly 150,000 and the
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was about 95,000. The line graph
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the
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showed
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multiple
times
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up and down during the whole period
whereas
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the
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was
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recorded
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only one decreasing line from 1996 to 1998.
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