The chart gives information about questionaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's coffee in five different Australian cities (Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart). Overall, it is clear from the chart the highest rate of city residents went to a cafe for drinking coffee or tea, while, the lowest rate of them purchased fresh coffee.

The chart gives information about questionaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's coffee in five different Australian cities (Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart).

Overall, it is clear from the chart the highest rate of city residents went to a cafe for drinking coffee or tea, while, the lowest rate of them purchased fresh coffee.
The bar chart below shows the data about
coffee
and
tea
buying and drinking habits in
five-town
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five towns
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of Australia.
Overall
, the picture gives information that
went
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going
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to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
was more popular than
bought
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buying
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fresh or
instant
coffee
in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban, and
Hobart
, but not in Adelaide. In the four cities; Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban, and
Hobart
,
went
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going
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to a cafe was the famous
way
for buying
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to buy
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and
drinking
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drink
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coffee
or
tea
. Those cities
also
gave
same
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the same
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trend that
bought
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buying
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instant
coffee
had the higher
consuments
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consumers
than
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those bought
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bought
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buying
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a
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apply
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fresh
coffee
in the
last
4 weeks.
Moreover
,
Hobart
and Melbourn had the
largerst
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largest
number of citizens who went to
cafe
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cafes
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at more than 60%, followed by Sidney and Brisbane at 60% and 55%. The second popular
way
to consume
coffee
and
tea
in
those town
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that town
those towns
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were
bought
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to buy
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instant
coffee
which Brisbane and
Hobart
had more than 50% percentage.
On the other hand
, the Adelaide residents had different
way
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ways
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to enjoy
coffee
or
tea
which
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and
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they
choose bought
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chose to buy
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instant
coffee
as
the
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an
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interesting
way
. Despite that,
bought
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buying
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fresh
coffee
was the least unpopular
way
to drink
coffee
in those 5 cities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, instant, hobart, way with synonyms.
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