The chart gives information about questionaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's coffee in five different Australian cities (Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart). Overall, it is clear from the chart the highest rate of city residents went to a cafe for drinking coffee or tea, while, the lowest rate of them purchased fresh coffee.

The chart gives information about questionaire results for drinking habits, purchasing fresh tea, and people's coffee in five different Australian cities (Sydney,Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart).

Overall, it is clear from the chart the highest rate of city residents went to a cafe for drinking coffee or tea, while, the lowest rate of them purchased fresh coffee.
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The bar chart below shows the data about
coffee
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and
tea
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buying and drinking habits in
five-town
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five towns
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of Australia.
Overall
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, the picture gives information that
went
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going
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to a cafe for
coffee
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or
tea
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was more popular than
bought
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buying
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fresh or
instant
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coffee
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in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban, and
Hobart
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, but not in Adelaide. In the four cities; Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban, and
Hobart
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,
went
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going
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to a cafe was the famous
way
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for buying
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to buy
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and
drinking
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drink
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coffee
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or
tea
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. Those cities
also
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gave
same
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the same
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trend that
bought
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buying
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instant
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coffee
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had the higher
consuments
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consumers
than
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those bought
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bought
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buying
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a
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apply
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fresh
coffee
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in the
last
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4 weeks.
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,
Hobart
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and Melbourn had the
largerst
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largest
number of citizens who went to
cafe
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cafes
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at more than 60%, followed by Sidney and Brisbane at 60% and 55%. The second popular
way
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to consume
coffee
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and
tea
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in
those town
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that town
those towns
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were
bought
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to buy
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instant
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coffee
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which Brisbane and
Hobart
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had more than 50% percentage.
On the other hand
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, the Adelaide residents had different
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way
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ways
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to enjoy
coffee
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or
tea
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which
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and
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they
choose bought
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chose to buy
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instant
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coffee
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as
the
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an
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interesting
way
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. Despite that,
bought
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buying
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fresh
coffee
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was the least unpopular
way
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to drink
coffee
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in those 5 cities.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, instant, hobart, way with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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