Many people believe thet media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this oppoinion?

I agree with the opinion that
celebrities
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gossip is having
negative
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effect on children. First of all, a lot of celebrity gossip is very tawdry. Much of the
news
coverage is full of words that we don't want children to see or hear,
such
as sexual harassment and sex scandals.
In addition
, there is a high possibility that there is a lot of
news
about suicides, etc., and if you only watch
such
news
at a sensitive time, it will affect you and cause you to become mentally ill. I still remember the
news
of a Korean high school student who followed the
news
of his
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idol's suicide. Based on the negative points mentioned above, I believe that excessive coverage of celebrities has an impact on children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overemphasis
  • Materialism
  • Skewed understanding
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Normalizing
  • Privacy Invasion
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Educational content
  • Distraction
  • Informative media
  • Promotion
  • Instant gratification
  • Glamorous
  • Consumption
  • Idolize
  • Superficial
  • Real-life heroes
  • Critical thinking
  • Engagement
  • Social issues
  • Negative behaviors
  • Awareness
  • Personal boundaries
  • Respect
  • Role models
  • Contribute
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