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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter 1)Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly 2)Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours 3)Suggest what should be done about the problem Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear Sir,

#system #rubbish #garbage #collection #area #neighbours #council #addresses #sir
I am Rohit resident of Gandhi Colony , I would like to bring to your notice that
garbage
 collection in my area
is
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has
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 not working properly
since
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for
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last
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the last
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 two months.
To begin
 with , I and my neighbours
are
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have been
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 suffering a lot from
this
 problem
from
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since
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 October. The
garbage
 Collector Person is coming to collect on
daily
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a daily
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 basis . Even though when they are coming and going , nobody is aware in my colony .
Moreover
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 it is stinking very badly in my home because my house is next to
dumping
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the dumping
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 zone.
In Addition
 , My mother is suffering from
respiratory
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a respiratory
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 disease so
this
 situation
make
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 her condition
more
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worse.
Therefore
 ,
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the
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Doctor advised her to stay in
calm
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 and clean place. Hereby I request you to Please make some rules and regulations to collection of
garbage
 . As per my
advise
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garbage
 collector should come
on
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at
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specified
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a specified
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time
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times
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on
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of
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daily
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day
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 and they should honk so that everyone
come
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 to know
that
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about them . Kindly do the needful Regards P
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. Introduction, problems, effects, and suggested solutions should be distinctly separated.
coherence cohesion
Include a more formal salutation and closing. The greeting should start with 'Dear [Council Position or Name],' and there should be a formal closure like 'Yours sincerely,' or 'Yours faithfully,' followed by your full name.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph presents a single issue or idea for better clarity and coherence. It helps readers follow your arguments and understand the letter's structure.
task achievement
Expand on each point you raise. Provide more detail on how the rubbish collection system is not working properly, how it affects people, and provide a specific, actionable suggestion for the council to consider.
task achievement
Although your tone is semi-formal, strive for a consistently formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding casual phrases and ensuring proper sentence structure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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