Most countries spend large amounts of money on weapons to defend themselves though they are not at war. Some believe those countries should spend the money to help poor countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

A school of thought holds that governments should allocate money to help underdeveloped

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of spending on boosting their military prowess because they are not facing

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threat of war. In my opinion, I agree with

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view. On the one hand, there are several reasons

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military strength is

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for a nation, even

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peacetime. First and foremost, a capable armed force plays a vital role in not only territorial sovereignty but

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national security and stability of a country.

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is because having a military capacity would allow a quick response to potential threats

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as terrorist attacks and deter other

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from threatening

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territorial integrity.

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, constantly boosting military strength and testing new weapons may give rise to an escalating arms race that can cause tensions and even conflicts between countries, especially neighbouring

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, I strongly believe that a portion of the

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budget could be allocated to addressing global poverty and humanitarian crises.

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is because many wars and conflicts in the world derive from poverty, inequality and oppression, which create desperation and resentment among people.

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, by providing financial support to poorer countries, developed

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can help impoverished ones address the root of their problems,

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as lack of education, health care and democracy.

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would improve not only the living standards and human rights of millions of people

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a sense of solidarity and cooperation between

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.

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, the world would become a safer and more harmonious place, where weapons are less needed.

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, the reallocation of

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funds will

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lead to a reduction in the number of weapon tests and the

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of greenhouse gases

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the detrimental environmental impacts of

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industries will be lessened. In conclusion,

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it is important to reinforce the armed

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, superpowers should use their resources and influence to improve the lives of others, as

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would have positive impacts on global peace

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the environment.