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The maps illustrate remarkable transformations in the coastal village of Seaville over a 30-year period, starting from 1980.

The maps illustrate remarkable transformations in the coastal village of Seaville over a 30-year period, starting from 1980.
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The maps compare how Seaville coastal village had changed from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, there
were
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 considerable development with
improvement
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the improvement
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 of residential
area
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areas
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. In 1980, there was a woodland that
replaced
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was replaced
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 by
golf
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a golf
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 course after 30 years.
Moreover
, at the south of the
woodland
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woodland,
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 there was a marsh
sorounded
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surrounded
 by holiday cottages and
hotel
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a hotel
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that
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apply
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located
in
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on
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 the edge of the island. In 2010, both
of
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apply
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marsh and cottages were replaced into permanent houses,
while
 the hotel
was remain
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remained
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position
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in position
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.
In
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On
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 the right side, at the east of permanent homes, the unused field had been constructed with residential utility.
Retirement
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 village and boat club
was
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were
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 built
in
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there.
This
 transformation was followed by demolishing sand dunes to create a hotel.
Furthermore
,
tea
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the tea
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 room was changed into
restaurant
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a restaurant
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. Holiday cottages had been relocated to the south of
east
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the east
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 bank which had
unchanged
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an unchanged
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 position.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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