Rain is our best friend. Do you agree or disagree?
Weather is
one
of Use synonyms
important
elements on Correct article usage
the important
earth
Capitalize word
Earth
since
its influence Change preposition
because of
to
Change preposition
on
Correct article usage
the environments
environments
. Many people Fix the agreement mistake
environment
then
, claim that rain is everyone's best friend. Linking Words
However
, I disagree Linking Words
witht
the statement. I believe that Correct your spelling
with
beside
the benefits, too much Change preposition
besides
rains
give the drawbacksFix the agreement mistake
rain
Rephrase
apply
also
.
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While
pouring water gives benefits to the crops, which is Linking Words
one
of the human's basic needs, the sunlight has more contribution to farmers. The warmth and the shine from the sun are needed for plants to grow, Use synonyms
that
results in good products. Correct pronoun usage
which
For example
, without Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
sunlights
, leaves would not be able to process Fix the agreement mistake
sunlight
the
Correct article usage
apply
photosyntesis
which Correct your spelling
photosynthesis
impacting to
failed crops.
Wrong verb form
impacts
On the other hand
, rain leads to different Linking Words
kind
of disasters. Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
One
main disaster Use synonyms
that is
caused by rainfall is flood. Jakarta, Linking Words
for example
, is Linking Words
one
city where flooding always occurs whenever Use synonyms
wet
season starts. Correct article usage
the wet
This
situation will Linking Words
then
affect Linking Words
to
more health and economic issues. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, Linking Words
landslide
Fix the agreement mistake
landslides
as well as
storms are the other disasters where heavy rainfalls are the main cause.
Linking Words
To sum up
, Linking Words
while
the wet season gives some advantages to Linking Words
human's
life, it is not the most essential factor. There are other aspects that Change noun form
human
needs
to be considered on Change the verb form
need
earth
, Capitalize word
Earth
such
as the sun for crops. Linking Words
In addition
, too Linking Words
much
raindrops often lead to disasters.Change the quantifier
many
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to have a clear thesis statement expressing your position in the introduction. In the concluding paragraph, summarize your main points and clearly restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
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Fully address the question by discussing your points of agreement or disagreement systematically, providing ample reasoning and examples.
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Avoid making generalizations and ensure that examples are specific and relevant to the topic. This will enhance the persuasiveness of your answer.
Word Count
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