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The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal, and Florida.

The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal, and Florida.
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The supplied table depicts the average age and
income
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 per individual and population below the
poverty
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line
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 among the three distinct states in the USA Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
Utal
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Utah
 has the highest percentage of
people
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 aged 18
years
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 and below.
Whereas
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,
Florida
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 experienced the largest number of 60
years
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 old and over.
California
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 has the highest figures regarding
income
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 per person and population under the
poverty
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line
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. In comparison to the percentage of
people
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 18
years
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 and below, Utal has the highest ratio 28%. Both
Florida
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 and
California
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 do not exceed 17% For individuals over 60
years
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, 23% are living in
Florida
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 followed by
California
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 at 13%
then
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 Utal at about 8%.
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,
California
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while
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 the per person's
income
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 is 2300$, has a high proportion of
people
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 under the
poverty
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line
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 of 16%. Aparell pattern can be seen in
Florida
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 22,000$ is the average
income
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 and 12% of the population suffers from poor
In contrast
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, Utal witnessed the lowest
income
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 of 17,000$ and the lowest number of
people
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 under the
poverty
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line
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 at 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, poverty, line, people, years, florida, california with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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