The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph line depicts the number of
books
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read by females and males at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 until 2014. It is clear from the graph that all lines started increasing from 2011 until 2013.
Men
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began reading nearly 3000
books
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in 2011 and
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increased to 4000
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in 2012. In 2013 the males recorded the same number of read
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as the females which approximately 10000
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for all genders. In 2014
men
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climbed to 14000
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. Women started with nearly 5000
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in 2011 which
higher
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than
men
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in 2011. In 2012 the number continued increasing,
in addition
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, it was higher than
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men
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for men
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.
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, in 2013 the two genders met at the same point
10000
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of 10000
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books
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,
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the women's line dropped to under 8000
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in 2014.
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, we could say that women started higher than
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until 2013,
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, they declined in 2014.
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