the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now

the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now
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The diagram illustrates the comparison of the layout of the
river
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park in the
last
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20 years and the newest in these current days.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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there are huge improvements in the layout involving the addition of community services,
such
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as shops, a supermarket and a post office. First of all, 20 years ago, the area where it is a
river
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park currently had only a railway track.
However
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, nowadays, new roads and buildings have been built in a
river
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park area. Estuary Road is one of the streets
that is
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situated along the sea and the
river
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and next to the Marina which can make visitors enjoy the beautiful scene of the sea and have a walk along the corniche
while
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they are on a relaxed trip.
In addition
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, there are a good number of services that are sited around the corniche and near Sunset Street,
such
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as shops and a supermarket, which can serve people to buy their snacks
while
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they are enjoying their trip.
Furthermore
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, there are some premises, like a post office, a library, a doctors' surgery and a college, that are located beside
the
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Sun Road. Opposite Estuary Street, a birdhouse has been structured in the middle of trees, which gives visitors a natural scene.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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