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Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other believe that access to the Internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The
internet
 has become a substantial part of life in the modern world.
Hence
, there has been an ongoing debate, on whether people should have free
internet
 access or should be considered as any other service and it should be paid
accordingly
.
This
 essay will analyze both views
as well as
 my personal opinion will be mentioned.
To begin
 with, some individuals consider access to
this
 as availability to any other human right, like water, food etc, and
this
 has to be provided
accordingly
.
Initially
,
this
 belief emerged because the
internet
 became the means of communication and information e.g. it is a significant part of day-to-day life. Take data
for example
, if someone wants to find information about anything, they will eventually find it on the websites.
Thus
, free availability will boost the economy of the government substantially since
this
 will increase the number of researchers and scientists.
However
, the government should increase the standard of living, so that everyone can pay for
this
 without being subsidized by taxes
On the other hand
, others assume that people are not obligated to it and should pay for it as any other service.
Firstly
,
this
 may cause a devastation in the government funds
as a result
 of subsidizing.
Secondly
,
this
 action is not reasonable
to begin
 with, because
such
 access would be harmful for society.
For instance
, apart from the advantages of
this
, there are a couple of disadvantages that depend on the usage of
this
 in general, one of them is social media which
distract
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 people greatly.
Therefore
, it should be only optional. In conclusion,
although
 there are some assuring reasons which could make both views right in some way, but, in my opinion, I think it will be more reasonable to put the
internet
 alongside with other services.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and lays out the structure of the essay, including the presentation of both views and your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow within paragraphs by using a range of cohesive devices and make sure that paragraphs flow smoothly from one to the next.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points further by using more specific examples and data to support your arguments and help clarify your position.
task achievement
Make sure to address the task fully by discussing both views and giving your own opinion with adequate explanation and support throughout the essay.
task achievement
Elaborate on your ideas in a more comprehensive manner, ensuring that each point is clearly stated and well-explained within its own paragraph.
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Incorporate more specific examples that are directly relevant to the topic and support your arguments. Avoid vague statements and generalize less.
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