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The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade labeled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade labeled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables give information approximately
sales
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the sales
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 of
Fairtrade_labelled
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Fairtrade labelled
coffee
 and
bananas
 in
period
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the period
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 1994
from
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to
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 2004 in some European
countries
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 of the
sales
coffee
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of coffee
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 in five European
countries
,
UK
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the UK
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sales
 marginally more than other
countries
,
while
 four
countries
sales
 slightly.
Furthermoe
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Furthermore
, about business
bananas
,
UK
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the UK
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 purchases dramatically more than four
countries
, other
countries
sales
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sell
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 more and less
bananas
. Looking at the details, about
sales
coffee
 between 1999 and 2004. UK
sales
 marginally a
half decade
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half-decade
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. After that, Denmark improved
buying
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by buying
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coffee
 three times in 5 years.
By contrast
, some
countries
 business slightly in
period
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the period
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 1999 to 2004 With
regards
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regard
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 to
sales
bananas
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of bananas
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 in five European
countries
. United Kingdom
sales
 dramatically more than other
countries
 almost 35 more a
half decade
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half-decade
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, Switzerland and Denmark increased almost four times in
period
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the period
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.
On the other hand
, Belgium and
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 purchases go down slightly
bananas
 between 1999
from
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and
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 2004.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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