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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005 (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005 (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 table provides data about the
numbers
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number
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 of
people
 who travel overseas
during
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for
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 four years from 1990 until 2005.
Overall
, the most count number of
people
travel
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travelling
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 around the world was
the
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in the
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last
 three years,
in
contrast
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 the first year was the least. As you
seen
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have seen
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, Europe was the significant country count of
people
 as the main destination in the whole period were between 280.2 and 400.2
million
. Following that,
American
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America
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was begin
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began
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 with 80.2
million
 in 1990
thus
, it increased by about 3
million
 but in the
last
 year was slightly
decresed
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decreased
 was 113.2.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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 some
people
 who chose Asian
was
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were
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 60 and 80
million
 in 1990 and 1995 respectively,
thus
 five years later they
modest
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modestly
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climed
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climbed
 by approximately 40
million
 after that they
reach
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reached
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 to
itis
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its
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 peak was exactly 135.8
million
. The
lest tow
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least two
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 popular
destination
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destinations
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was
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were
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 Africa and
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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 which are count of
travellar
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travellers
 in
asih
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Asih
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 was
lest
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less
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 than around 30
million
.
However
, in
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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 was less than 15.8
million
 during the entire period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, thus".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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