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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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These plans illustrate different usage of
ground
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 floor in a particular construction from 1958 to now.
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, the data reveals it had three functions over the period,
office
, apartment and
flowershop
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flower shop
.
Although
 their functions were different, the kitchen
has maintained
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 unchanged throughout the time. The
office
had been
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was
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 in the building
since
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from
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 1958 to 1984. The functions of
chambers
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the chambers
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 suit the demand of workers,
such
 as
office
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the office
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 of
manager
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the manager
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, assistant and secretary,
in addition
,
the
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to the
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 reception area and meeting room for the
costumers
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customers
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. From 1985 to 2000, it was an apartment for residents. There were two bedrooms,
living
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a living
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 room,
bathroom
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a bathroom
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 with
shower
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a shower
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 and
the
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a
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 kitchen which was built in the time of
office
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the office
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. The flower shop started
at
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in
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 2001, the open space was larger than the other two periods and it was used for placing flowers.
Rest
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The rest
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 of the areas were
office
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an office
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,
play
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a play
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 area for kids,
place
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a place
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 for writing gift cards and
the
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an
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 unchanged kitchen.
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Task Achievement
For Task Achievement, candidates must respond completely to all parts of the task. The response appears to cover salient features but may lack a full interpretation of the plans. To improve, expand on the details and ensure that comparisons are made when required by the question.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion are assessed by clarity of writing and paragraphing. This report has room for improvement in terms of logical sequencing and using a range of cohesive devices. Be sure to organize information logically, using paragraphs effectively and make clear connections between ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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