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The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of British
people
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 from different age groups donating money to charities between 1990 and 2010.
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, the population between 36-50 and 51-65 contributed the most significant amount of money to charities. Individuals who were between 18 and 25
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 old donated the lowest fractions in both
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. In 1990, the proportion of
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 aged between 36 and 50
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 old was just above 40%,
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 ratio followed by the 51-65
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 old
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 and the 65
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 old and older
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 with 35 and around 32% respectively.
People
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 between 26 and 35
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 old
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 just above 30% and the youngest
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 of 18-25
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 old was roughly 17%. After two decades, the proportion of
people
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ranged
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 51-65
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 old replaced its 36-50
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 old counterpart as the most dominant population donating money to charity with just under 40%. The
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 of
people
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 between 18-25
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 old saw the most dramatic drop of around 10% over the 20
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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