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The chart below shows the yield of wheat, barley, rice, and other grains grown in three different countries in 2001.

The chart shows how much wheat, barley, rice, and other
grains
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 were grown in the
USA
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,
China
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, and
India
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 in 2001.
Overall
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, The
USA
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 and
China
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 grew the most
grains
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, leaving
India
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 far behind. Other
grains
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 were grown the most in all three countries, followed by barley, rice, and
then
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 wheat. In barley, the
USA
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 grew the most, about 7.2
million
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tonnes
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, a bit more than
China
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 and way more than
India
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. Wheat followed a similar pattern: the
USA
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 grew around 3.5
million
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tonnes
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,
China
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 2.5
million
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tonnes
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, and
India
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 only 1.2
million
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tonnes
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. For rice,
China
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 grew the most at 6
million
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tonnes
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, followed closely by the
USA
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 at the same amount, which was way more than what
India
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 produced. Other
grains
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 were
also
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 high in
China
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 and the
USA
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, both at 9
million
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tonnes
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,
while
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India
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 had much less, just under 2
million
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tonnes
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grains, usa, china, india, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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