The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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This
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map depicts the layout of two possible
location
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locations
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of
supermarket
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supermarkets
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in Garlsdon City.
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, it is clearly apparent that the location of s1 and s2 is opposite of each other, S1 is located in the suburban area,
meanwhile
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s2 is in the heart of the town. Turning our attention to s1 that
take
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place
in
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the
north west
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northwest
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side of the maps, it
have
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its own advantage
eventhough
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even though
its
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it's
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quite far from
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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area. On the left, it is close to
railway
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the railway
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and on the
right
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right,
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it is next to Hindon that have around 10.000 citizens. Moving to S2, it is the best location since it is located in the middle of the town
center
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and in there, there is no traffic zone and have
close
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a close
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distance to
railway
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the railway
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it
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also
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is also
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quite close the
the
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neighboring
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neighbouring
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cities, it takes 16
kilometers
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kilometres
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from Brandson and 25
kilometers
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kilometres
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from
Crandson
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Grandson
.
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This
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These
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two cities all have
general
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a general
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population above 10.000.
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to
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apply
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s2
take
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takes
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place near the housing in the south side of the city.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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